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Old 12-21-2009, 03:25 PM   #6
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I enjoyed reading the second part of this. The ending was fulfilling, and while it was a bit sad, it was realistic and I think that you made a better story for it. While most people like happy endings, not everything can always end well, and I think that adds the depth to your story that was necessary.

This was a great episode, and I think that you did a nice job dealing with Al's emotions in relation to his mother, as well as balancing the general objective of the leap and how Sam was dealing with it. I notice that in some episodes, there is way too much focus placed on the project. However, I think that you kept the story related to the leap, and Al's past, and not on the project. Great job!
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