So here it is, the leap-in of a QL Fanfic that i've been scribbling down all luchtime today and last evening - mostly inspired by Asearcher's(Helen in Colorado - I remembered which one - yay to self!) brilliant fanfiction I was looking at last night and our chat, some constructive criticism would certainly help guys!
So here it goes:
Lightning Never Strikes Twice....
By Simon Smith aka: Enterprise
Copyright Simon Smith 2006
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>>> Leap - In <<<
As the familiar brilliant blue light erupted around Sam, he snapped out of his thought of pure bliss with Angelice, trying to stay in her arms, her flowing silky-brown hair swaying in the gentle breeze of the ocean and look deep into her beautiful hazel eyes, but his memory was already swiss cheesing again, ''I lo__'', he was cut off, feeling himself being ripped from her and then in an instant he was gone. The memory fading as quickly as it had been created in Dr. Beckett's mind.
FLASH! Sam opened his eyes, ''Uunngh...'', he raised his hand to his forehead to try and massage the throbbing pain from the leap - induced headache that he had suffered a million times previously. ''NO CHANCE!!'' a man screamed at him and before he knew it, Sam felt himself smacked in the stomach by a giant double-ended, sand-filled, plasti-hammer. ''Oooff..'' Sam doubled over, the wind knocked from him and the emptiness following, Camera flashes and cheering crowds drowned out his thoughts, Sam gasped for breath.
''The Sledge takes nothin' from no-one, no pain from anythang' and especially not nothin' from the likes of you!!'' the huge man swung the hammer down with brute force and Sam was smacked down to the floor, his face thwacking against the floor. The crowd cheered and from the stage arena came a booming spray of fireworks, #GLAD-I-A-TORS!!#,
''Ohh Boy'', Sam said, before passing out to the screams of a taunting crowd.
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So here it goes:
Lightning Never Strikes Twice....
By Simon Smith aka: Enterprise
Copyright Simon Smith 2006
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>>> Leap - In <<<
As the familiar brilliant blue light erupted around Sam, he snapped out of his thought of pure bliss with Angelice, trying to stay in her arms, her flowing silky-brown hair swaying in the gentle breeze of the ocean and look deep into her beautiful hazel eyes, but his memory was already swiss cheesing again, ''I lo__'', he was cut off, feeling himself being ripped from her and then in an instant he was gone. The memory fading as quickly as it had been created in Dr. Beckett's mind.
FLASH! Sam opened his eyes, ''Uunngh...'', he raised his hand to his forehead to try and massage the throbbing pain from the leap - induced headache that he had suffered a million times previously. ''NO CHANCE!!'' a man screamed at him and before he knew it, Sam felt himself smacked in the stomach by a giant double-ended, sand-filled, plasti-hammer. ''Oooff..'' Sam doubled over, the wind knocked from him and the emptiness following, Camera flashes and cheering crowds drowned out his thoughts, Sam gasped for breath.
''The Sledge takes nothin' from no-one, no pain from anythang' and especially not nothin' from the likes of you!!'' the huge man swung the hammer down with brute force and Sam was smacked down to the floor, his face thwacking against the floor. The crowd cheered and from the stage arena came a booming spray of fireworks, #GLAD-I-A-TORS!!#,
''Ohh Boy'', Sam said, before passing out to the screams of a taunting crowd.
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